People smell the toxic fumes that are polluting the air. The cars are passing out fumes and all you smell is disgusting stuff from the cars and the huge pipes at a factory. Smell the smoke. Smoke black as the night sky when it is pitch black with no stars or moon showing.
People hear all the cars engine and lights. The pipes in the factory set off huge noises which spread around the country. All the people yelling at each other about the traffic and that makes babies scream. Noises as loud as an elephant charging at her enemies which are trying to get her baby.
All around is the dark black clouds of pollution going into the air and the cars not going anywhere. The lights of the cars are flashing. All these huge pipe will block peoples view of the sky. The sky is grey and not blue. You see so many cars that you think you are looking at all the types of candy in a candy shop.
You feel all the cars crowding up around like a litter of kittens that are warm and wanting cuddles. You feel the warmth. You feel all the black clouds going into the air. You can feel your getting tighter clenching on to the steering wheel.
You can taste the fumes going into your mouth when you breathe. You also taste the food that you ate before hand coming up your throat try to get out because you want to vomit.
Paris you had good SPG and good describing words. You wrote a good amount for the time we had to write. Some of it didn't make sense though so you might want to re-read your writing and check it over again. Well done.
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